Entry 1
Capturing the message
Item 1: Poem
MY PETTY PEEVES
By Pradeepika Dayaratne
See a pin and pick it up
all the day you will have good luck
See a pin and let it lay
bad luck you will have all the day
all the day you will have good luck
See a pin and let it lay
bad luck you will have all the day
bad luck
Rhetorical devices:
Metaphor: a pin- the sudden chances.
Repetition: the repetition of the phrase “See the pin and...”
Antithesis: “pick it up><let it lay”, “bad luck><good luck”
Rhyme: “up-luck”, “lay-day”
Parallelism: the similar structure
Message: There are many sudden chances in our life. Sometimes, a small dropped pin can bring you happiness and luck if you care about it, but it also provides you bad luck when you ignore it.
Item 2: Cartoons
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Rhetorical devices:
Overstatement: The traffic jam in Hanoi.
Metaphor: The bad traffic conditions in most of Hanoi’s road.
Irony: The unique solution .
Message: The congestion occurs every day in every Hanoi’s road. This bad traffic condition only solutes with a very unique and weird way. People sure that this is the most effective solution in rush hour
Item 3: Song lyric
Firefly
When I said go I never meant away
You ought to know the freaky games we play
could you forgive and learn how to forget
hear me as I'm calling out your name
Firefly come back to me
make the night as bright as day
I'll be looking out for you
tell me that your lonely too
firefly come lead me on
follow you into the sun
that's the way it ought to be
firefly come back to me
You and me
we shared a mystery
we were so close
like honey to the bee
And if you tell me how to make you understand
I'm minor in a major kinda way
Firefly come back to me
make the night as bright as day
I'll be looking out for you
tell me that your lonely too
firefly come lead me on
follow you into the sun
that's the way it ought to be
firefly come back to me
Fly firefly through the sky
come and play with my desire
don't be long don't ask why
I can't wait another night
Rhetorical devices:
Metonymy: The firefly for the girl’s lover.
Simile: Their close like honey to the bee.
Repetition: the phrase “firefly come back to me”
Rhyme: “away-play”, “to be-me”,”sky-desire-why-night”
Message: The girls in love are always troublesome. Sometimes, they do not respect the happy moment they get until they losing that love. However, it is too late to regret. Therefore, you should value all the love that you are.
You illustrate your three items with colorful pictures, which makes these items lively and attracting. I am really impressed!
Trả lờiXóaMoreover, there is one song lyric in your entry which no one in our class has mentioned before. That's a creative thinking!
Besides, I also have some detailed comments for your items.
Item 1: I think you should change some words in your message to make it meaningful. "Provide sb with sth" mean "to give someone something that they need", but in the message you use "provide you bad luck". It is not suitable.
Item 2:
- What is the unique and weird way to solve traffic jam?
- Pay attention to grammar in your sentences. You can try these:
+ The traffic congestion occurs in every corner in Hanoi every day.
+ This bad traffic condition is only solved with a very unique and weird way.
Item 3:I like this very much.
Anyway, thanks for sharing significant messages!